Pretty good metal track, I enjoyed listening to it. However, there are a few things that could be done to improve it:
- Work on your build-ups, typically between verses and choruses. Good metal songs have some sort of lead-up into chorus, at least every once and a while within a song, which encourages a listener to keep listening. Right now its more alternating between verse and chorus, which have similiar sound, and to dramaticise the change I think some sort of transition or build-up between sections would be very beneficial.
- Somewhat along those lines, try experimenting with dynamics. The dynamics of this song are the same, and far as the instrumental aspect is concerned, the entire time. Occassionally the vocals change ever so slightly between verse and chorus, but that is one of the few exceptions. Try variations in dynamics or gradually getting louder or softer between changing dynamics.
- The vocals. Pretty good, but they are only average right now. I'm not sure whether or not the vocalist has a vocal background or he is new to singing, and although I mean no offence in what I say, I think that more practice could be done to improve the vocals even though you are singing in the metal genre. Right now it just sounds like someone doing vocals not a vocalist, and there is an important difference between the two. The vocals also sound very seperate from the instrumental tracks for some reason to me, I'm not sure how this could be fixed but I'm sure through experimentation a solution could be found.
However, overall a very good song. I wish you the best.
Thanks for the tips. I'm aware of how to build transitions to chorus etc. This song just has a mellower transition. Mainly on purpose.
On the vocals, I am a vocalist per se. This whole album for the most part is an experiment in mixing styles of music and vocals. This particular song has the feel I wanted, and since I am the musician and vocalist... I'm happy with it. Browse around my other album and non album songs submitted this year. I'd love your input.
As it goes, I'm not charging anything for an "album". The release is free...and it is what it is. If people don't like it, I don't really care about their reasons. Someone else said they wouldn't pay for it. Cool, they don't have to. I'm pretty awesome that way.
Thanks again for the review.